MSESLII
Isaac Yu
April
19, 2013
Rising
action
As
the young detective want to find out more clues in the house, the strange man
in the nowhere cleans out more clues, so this young detective decide to find
out this stranger first, and capture him and ask him about this case, because
he think this stranger maybe related with the death, and related with the boss.
He asked
some citizen live in the town to figure out which organization is the most
scary and most frightful one, and where did they lived, and which way of
killing people most of them are using, because if he know all the think, he can
easily find out the real murder.
He walks
in to the police station
“Excuse me sir, do you know which
organization in the town is the most frightful, and the most scary one?” the
young detective asked.
“Of course we know sir, this organization
already kill all the billionaires in the town, and we can’t find out the place
where they live, and this group call MTC.”
“Thank you sir, if I need your help I’ll
come back soon” said the detective.
When
the young detective walk out the street, the cold wind pass through his face,
he had a glimpse, he saw the stranger, and at the same time, he already know
who is the stranger and where did the boss live. The real game started now.
Your main character is a smart man! he knows the details to survey the case, and your rising action really did make me feel exciting about what might happen next, good story! -Daniel Tsao
ReplyDeleteHi Issac:
ReplyDeleteYour story is filled with nervous atmosphere, let me want to keep following your step, and find out what will happen next, it is a good rising action, can't wait to see the climax.
-Vivi Weng
Issac:
ReplyDeleteThe character in the story is very clever and careful. And he is claim when he was searching for the evidence, won’t be flushed and ignore the things the detail. He is a good detective!
- Peggy Hsieh
Hi Isaac,
ReplyDeleteYour story make me feel exciting and in your story you also using "talking" to make your story more interesting and you have a best ending that make the people who read it really want to know what will happen.